Let me express my feelings,
beneath the blue, above the green,
where the path asks me to walk,
with the whole of GOD’s blessings.
I dive in the sea to wake me up,
I see the sun down like the ones above,
I have lost the way, the way to love,
I find no one to help me out.
Then I see you, with a hope in heart
You give your hand to take me up,
but the earth come down to the deepest,
far from you, where i drop down hard.
The darkness spreads and makes me blind,
I search for a way but I fail to find,
the rocks come closer, to crush me down,
Will you come love, to make me fine?


























loved the last para ..and the optimism shining through between those clouds of pessimism
thanks wordsworthfan…:)
i really like this poem, it’s dark and awesome yet hopeful as well. great work. 1 suggestion, third to last line: maybe ‘i search for a way that i can’t find’, just to make it smoother?
keep it up ur awesome